The more I look at it

Just sat down to write again after running to the store and making dinner.  I decided to give Sherry a quick read-through before continuing it.

I was writing this one in first person, and it works okay through most of the beginning of the story.  Once I hit the sex, it kind of falls apart.  The character sort of limits my word choice, and it’s coming across really Penthouse Letters and juvenile sounding with so many “dick” and “pussy” repetitions in there.

Think it’s time to convert this one to third person, and get someone telling the story who isn’t going to make me want to smack him LOL  He’s fine as a character, but as a story-teller, he needs some serious help.

Probably delay it a bit, but Two Titties is ready to go anyway.