Musing about a story in progress

“Like Riding a Bike” is out at SOL and Lush.  I posted the updates on Twitter, Facebook, the website, and my forum, but time was tight before work, so I skipped the update here, and apparently forgot when I got home :p

Then I turned right around and forgot to post about the new Website Exclusive short story, “Sucksess” here as well.

You can link up to them from the website if you missed them.

Now, on to what I clicked “New Post” over.  I’ve been working on a story called, “A Fine Substitute” and I’m a good distance into the final sex scene.  Problem is, it feels flat.

I put it down to think about it, and ended up wandering to the forum at Lit.  In the process of responding to a post, I got to thinking that I haven’t posted a MILF story from the woman’s point of view for a long time.  All of the recent ones have been from the guy’s perspective.

Then that thought merged with the new story.  I think the problem is that there’s not enough over-the-top excitement for the guy in the story.  The MILF is exactly what the title says — a substitute.  A fine one, but a substitute, nonetheless.  He’s into it, but not “oh my god, I can’t believe this is happening!” excited.

The MILF, on the other hand, is looking for a substitute for her vibrator.  Getting into bed with a young stud is going to provide that “best day ever!” feeling for her.

I’m going to try flipping the script on this one and start a version coming from her perspective to see how it goes.  It might very well solve the flat feeling of the story, and it certainly would put a new entry in a neglected segment of my dominant genre.